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The Fight Between Bob and Ricky
On Monday, March 7, Th 2009, Ricky went over to Bob’s house. Ricky and Bob wanted to play basketball.
There was only one aired up basketball. So Bob and Ricky got into a big fight. There was punching, name calling and even shoving. After about 30 minutes Bob and Ricky got tired so Bob shoved Ricky into the pool to slap some sense into him since it was winter time. The pool was freezing cold. Bob’s pool does not have a water heater. So the pool was freezing cold for Ricky. Ricky started
yelling, ‘’What the Heck Is the Matter with You Bob!!!!!!!!!!!’’ .
Well Bob and Ricky made up and both said,’’ I’m sorry for
Punching you’’. So the two friends made up. Bob got the
basketball. But Bob said, ’’why don’t we share the basketball
So there’s no more fighting’’.
The end.
By Chase Harlen Mann.
Chase,
ReplyDeleteI noticed how you used dialogue in your writing. When you use dialogue it helps the reader to understand your character.
Miss Reynolds
I really love your use of dialogue! It really added to the action of your story : o )
ReplyDeleteMrs.Goins
I'm glad Ricky and Bob apologized to each other. Perhaps, it would have been easier to share from the beginning. Pushing other children into a pool is dangerous. If my child did that he would be grounded for a very long time. I'm glad this was a fiction story. Good job, Chase. You did a great job describing the action. Let's not ever let this story become non-fiction ;)
ReplyDeleteGood job, buddy.
- Mom